So, what went well - the implementation of vintage media clips between sections worked very well and complements the piece - reminds me of a Swedish metal band i'm into. And the sounds you have used are authentic and don't sound shoddy or rushed.
However, it is simply a little too quick. Quick can be good! But the approach of MOAR QUIKK is not necessarily the way forward sir! Slow this down a tad, then try uploading a reprise. Then you should have a great techno piece under your name!